2014年在职教育硕士联考英语复习指导(3)

　　第三节句子写作

　　一.常见错误分析(From Wrong sentence to correct sentence)

　　a. 句子片段，断句 (sentence fragment)

　　There is a pretty American girl, she’s smiling.

　　It is a cartoon, that a cock give a admission to others.

　　But if not, is it a hen?

　　Because mostly people are freed in the same time.

　　In 1995, there is one fish on the ocean, but ships are many and many.

　　b. 时态混乱

　　In 1995 the number of fish we can see were very few and at the same time, many fishing occurred before our eyes. (time reference: 1995)

　　During the past time there are not abundant goods in the market. People would not concern service quality so long as they could buy what they needed. (time reference: past time)

　　Every year about 300 million people died disease that deprive from smoking. Smoking use much money every year. (time reference: every year)

　　In 1994, the total product of tobacco is 14.364 billion pounds and in 1995, is 14.2 billion pounds. (time reference: 1994 + 1995)

　　What caused this phenomenon? (time reference: null)

　　c. 代词误用

　　It is incredible to many people. Cigarette smokers spend money for illness.

　　He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.

　　Everyone should do that he or she have promised, but not just their duty.

　　Second, perhaps this is the main reason.

　　Can you find anything new in this?

　　d. 其他错误

　　If you do your homework thoughtfully, a student should be able to pass this examination.

　　Jerry swallowed a steak, and an entire half a gallon of ice cream was eaten by him.

　　Seen from the top of the mountain, we found the small town more beautiful.

　　二.句子质量提升 (From correct-only sentence to enhanced sentence)

　　1.句子质量的基本改进

　　a. 短句(choppy sentence)

　　Water is an enduring source of power. It is also an unlimited energy source. Dams produce power. They have existed for a long time. But windmills are relatively new.

　　We must find new sources of energy. Natural sources of energy are decreasing. Solar energy is a promising new source of energy. Solar energy is energy from the sun.

　　b. 松散句 (loose sentence)

　　信息重要性确定句式

　　1) I was interested in English, but I finally chose computer as my major.

　　2) I chose computer as my major, although I was interested in English.

　　多于2个句子的松散句，可以考虑修改

　　Many students attend classes all morning, and then they work all afternoon, and they also have to study at night, so they are usually exhausted by the weekend.

　　c. 赘言问题 (redundant)

　　In my opinion, I believe exam-oriented assessment system needs to be changed.

　　In general, young people these days tend to remain single.

　　The reason why people choose to live in the countryside is because there is no pollution nor noise there.

　　It is highly important to find a solution to solve this problem.

　　d. 汉化英语 (Chinese-English)

　　Water shortage is a serious problem in big cities, such as Shanghai, because it has over ten million people.

　　Government should work hard to raise the living level of the people.

　　Doing regular exercises can help our body.

　　2.句子质量的加强改进

　　a. 强调句

　　b. 倒装句

　　c. 平行句